david | 21 Apr 2008

you know that other guy is right this story was just getting good and could be so much better come on dude!

123456789 | 04 Sep 2007

Come on dude! This story is awesome! CUM BACK AND FINISH IT!!!!!!!!!!

Lee Mariner | 22 Aug 2007

What could be a beautiful story is so poorly written that it detracts from what the writer is trying to relay. There is no continuity, the author jumps from one phase of his experiences to another leaving the reader wondering what has happened, and where the story is going. It is a pity the author did not find the services of an editor or at the very lest proof his writing.

Johann | 13 Jul 2007

That's it!??! MORE!!!