i agree w/ both judas and lee...its good cuz it jumps into da juicy da chatacters are clear and its short but it does lack depth...mayb descriptions of da guys wat robert sees feels smells as hes getn tis bj...small things can make such a gud story great...and temp. i love ur stories! they hav a fun and funni quality thats unexpectd and fo a wmn as myself refreshn in gay erotica
Judas | 16 Jul 2009
O-M-PENIS!! This is an amazing story! Its perfect! Not too long (thats what she said LoL) & its not too short & it definately makes me think about what happens after... I love how it ends!! Its the best! He jus gave a dude a bj and then go's back to work like nothing happened... and did anybody even see what happened!? It makes me wonder, & did they ever meet up outside of the store on days other than saturday? Its a really good story, a sequel would be nice but this short story is fucking amazing and gets straight to the action and then leaves you imagining what else they couldve done & i say that in a good way ; ) well yea, overall this is a really badass story... I look foward to more. Bye.
Lee Mariner | 02 Jul 2007
I'm sorry, I can't give the story a 5 star rating. It lacks depth, and the plot is pre-determined. Very little is left to the imagination of the reader.
With a little more thought, and considering the location and characters involved, it could have been a really good story.
alwaysnmyhead | 24 Mar 2010
Judas | 16 Jul 2009
Lee Mariner | 02 Jul 2007
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