knobup | 11 Feb 2011

Yep, u need to get the names right. But a good story

maskedcritic | 24 Jun 2009

Loved it but you made one minor mistake: in the beginning Roger called Bruce Dave.

HardCandy | 23 Jun 2009

wow cool tell me which shop is that i must get a hair cut too (HAHAHA)

Charlie Bi | 23 Jun 2009

Its good, just work on grammer and spelling because it getts confusing at times. Other than that it is okay.

sucker3587 | 20 Jun 2009

not bad---from reading your story i take it that you are new to writing. Kirst, keep your names straight. His name was Bruce but later Roger calls him Dave then again later it's Bruce. I've written many and that has happened to me. Suggestion....think the story thru then make a list of your characters before you start writing so you can refer back to it if necessary. I write under the name sucker, if you care to read some of mine. you can contact me at sucker3587@hotmail.com

keep it up---not bad at all--I had a barber once that I wish this had happened with.

SugarMAN | 19 Jun 2009

WOW this story is really a hot one.
I cant even imagine having sex with a barber. you are totaly hott man.