Love16 | 27 Jan 2011

Not the greatestly writen but okay plot but needs work

CutCok4u | 10 Jan 2010

it was good but lacked in description and detail

Beamer | 12 Apr 2009

Have someone help you with editing; story is ok but needs detailing and expansion as well as better formating.

arabniichan | 31 May 2008

i'm guessing this is a real story?? it's not as juicy as the rest.

Reader 2 | 21 May 2008

1st bit gud but not reli erotica cuz yu dint even detail

Tarzan | 10 May 2008

weak